Talk:Dug

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Ok, I've revised almost all aspects of this page and removed the reference links for now. Onto what has been revised.

1) A lot of the information listed didn't make sense. Sometimes the information was past tense "the Dug were" and sometimes it was present "the Dug are" so I've revised it.

2) Information was posted twice. Information which is supposedly historical ended up in the social and cultural areas and then reposted in the historical area. This seems to be pointless and not properly proof-read. I would advise next time to make sure you can discern what is historical and what is social and construct proper paragraphs accordingly.

3) I, realize, that, wookieepedia, likes, to, place, commas, everywhere, however this does not form proper sentence structure and much of that has been removed. Unless you actually speak like you're short of breath all the time I found that with the information there many of the commas could be removed.

4) The information was fractured. One sentence briefly discussed Dug physiology and went onto mating rituals and then the next paragraph went back to Dug physiology and onto something else. Everything relating to race physiology should be in one paragraph, everything else should be grouped together according to relevance.

Finally, some of the information references canon events from wookieepedia which does not match information from SWC. For example the Dug description in SWC mentioned what the Old Republic did whereas the information from wookieepedia mentions what the Galactic Republic did. For the sake of differentiation and something I will bring up in SWC Wiki vs Wookieepedia we need to have a clear understand of what government did what and what they were known by. I've re-edited everything to be Galactic Republic due to the Old Republic's existence in SWC as a safety precaution. I've also edited out years, 8000 BBY, I mean I don't even know if we even had a battle of yavin since no death star exists in SWC and I would prefer we stick to the timeline dates as they are in the list of chronological events.--Dakha Rednax

Thank you very much. I realize you're all a lot better at both Wiki and Combine than myself, that's why I asked for help.
In most places I try to give vague dates and get rid of exact BBY dates, and replace Old Republic with Galactic Republic for the reason you mentioned. If I missed something - apologies.
I tried to avoid doubling information, if I did - apologies. English is not my native language. Same goes for information fracturing.
About the tenses - I noticed the fact that the Wookiee has everything in Past Simple only recently. Now I keep to the Present Simple. - Kinsa Rha, 7.05.2011, 10:56 GMT