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Yes, I get that but reading the article.. its more like a summary of who did what.. This guy founded it.. this guy became leader... etc. What is not neutral about it. thats my question "--[[User:Siejo Kutol|Siejo Kutol]] 19:35, 2 March 2011 (GMT)" | Yes, I get that but reading the article.. its more like a summary of who did what.. This guy founded it.. this guy became leader... etc. What is not neutral about it. thats my question "--[[User:Siejo Kutol|Siejo Kutol]] 19:35, 2 March 2011 (GMT)" | ||
Well, I'd say the phrasing mostly. For example. just in the first paragraph there is a bold, yet unsupported claim, "is one of the strongest independent factions in the galaxy", and a statement of goals that assumes negative behavior on the part of your competition: "The Corporate Alliance's goal is to make sure tha[t] no one company can [...] price gouge the galaxy's beings of all their hard earned credits." Though that might be your goal, the wording implies that other factions do, in fact, "price gouge [...]" regularly, again without any supporting evidence. --[[User:Arkhaios Plaga|Arkhaios Plaga]] 17:17, 4 March 2011 (GMT) | |||
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What can be addressed to make this more neutral?
Well first of all you should always add a signature to your posts (type "--~~~~"), as for making it neutral, I would delete it all and rewrite it again looking on it from another perspective, showing both sides good and bad. Or let someone know of your history and let him/her write it for you. --Ryan Roche 22:57, 28 February 2011 (GMT)
Yes, I get that but reading the article.. its more like a summary of who did what.. This guy founded it.. this guy became leader... etc. What is not neutral about it. thats my question "--Siejo Kutol 19:35, 2 March 2011 (GMT)"
Well, I'd say the phrasing mostly. For example. just in the first paragraph there is a bold, yet unsupported claim, "is one of the strongest independent factions in the galaxy", and a statement of goals that assumes negative behavior on the part of your competition: "The Corporate Alliance's goal is to make sure tha[t] no one company can [...] price gouge the galaxy's beings of all their hard earned credits." Though that might be your goal, the wording implies that other factions do, in fact, "price gouge [...]" regularly, again without any supporting evidence. --Arkhaios Plaga 17:17, 4 March 2011 (GMT)